Writing Week 4

In week 4 in writing we had to finish our story from last week and this is my story is about a elf who loses her family in a plane crash, after the most shy pixie comes and asks her if she wants her.........  you should read the story your self for now no more spoilers. After you read my story tell me in the comments if you  like it or if I should change something so I can improve my next story. 
Friendship story by Me